Rough Cut

I really like the lighting when Ted is sat at his desk, i think the way it casts shadows and creates silhouettes is effective and works well with our film noir style. It also helps to create tension and enigma.  The mise en scene works really well, the costumes and props look good with the lighting and settings and fit with the story line. (0.02 - 0.14)

Our choice of music is effective in gradually picking up the tension, it wasn't too obvious that something was going to happen which added more of a surprise to the attack. The overlay of the second track adding extra sounds in specific places added tension and worked really well. e.g. 0:33

I think the lighting is too dark in places and the titles look too random and out of place. Some of the cuts are not as smooth as they could be but we could fix this by re editing parts. The font at the beginning is different to the font of the rest of the titles, this makes it looks unorganised and not well thought out. Also we have not included the title of our film.

At 1:48 when Ruby is attacked it appears the first little bit of her dialogue has been cut off, we shall have to edit this to make it fit to maintain the pace and fluidity of the piece. 

The ending of our opening is too abrupt  we should add a fade to black to make her death linger in the minds of the audience. This will add emotion, suspense and anxiety, giving the audience something to think about. 

The shot of the address written on the paper at 0:12 is not left on for long enough, this makes it difficult to read and causes confusion. The address needs more focus as it is a fairly important part of the scene. Similarly we are first introduced to Ruby by the image on the desk at 0:36. this is an important shot as it begins to suggest that Ted is not quite right and installs suspicion into the audience, we should re edit so that there is more focus on the image by leaving it on longer.